one deep breath
1
recognising you
when i glance in the mirror
flowing eternal
2
two figures walking
caught in the passing headlights
as the night claims them
*
Reading the link on one deep breath for Kristin Boryca's study on the four aesthetic terms in haiku - sabi, wabi, yugen and aware, I wondered if they could relate to the four elements - fire, air (wind), water, earth. (whatever they might mean!)
I came up with;
sabi - solitude - air (or wind)
wabi - stability - earth
yugen - mystery - fire
aware - impermanence - water
a pointless exercise but I had a bit of time on my hands.
9 Comments:
Wonderful insights on haiku
now I know i am simply a beginner
Beautiful. I love #2 ... as the night claims them. Very mysterious. Thanks for the information. You were up early!
Yes, Ian that second haiku is particularly mysterious. Well done.
I hadn't ever considered relating wabi, sabi, yugen and aware to the elements, and now I shall. Thank you for this wonderful insight and for the two poignant haiku too. There is mystery and melancholy in both, perfect for a late autumn evening.
firt, the haiku are, as always, succinctly powerful
secondly...at dinner tonight i was making a list of ideas for future ODB topics and believe it or not, "the elements" is on the list! (kinda creepy, huh?) would you mind if i mention (and credit you) with the comparisons you came up with?
thanks all.
actually, helen, i think my blog clock is out of sync with UK time, i'm certain i was tucked up in bed for half these posts! ;o)
i didn't want to explain too much, in keeping with the mysterious theme, but these two figures I saw last week, an elderly couple walking along the grass verge at night. then coming home, in a totally different place i saw another elderly couple walking on the verge! they couldn't possibly be the same couple - or were they?
yes, susan, by all means - if you think it reads okay. :o)
I like your poems, especially the second one. Very mysterious, and yet a familiar scene. Also thought your haiku element associations were very interesting (especially as I used the fire element in my own yugen.)
catching a glimpse of the mystery...you wrapped up truth & wisdom in a beautiful package...thanks
especially liked these two ku
enjoyed your thoughts on process too
cheers
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